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Here is a little except of Ashe's story. It's a small portion of a big I wrote last night that I thought would make a good little glimpse into the story.

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How does it FEEL physically/mentally to read

How does it flow in terms of structure; sentence to sentence, paragraph to paragraph

How does it flow in terms of story

Overall I just need to know a general sense of how it reads. Anything more in depth than that would be appreciated, of course.

I do want to put a disclaimer that it is, in essence, an extreme rough draft and written almost entirely through flow of consciousness, so I'm not really looking for too much input on the minutia. Though some of that will probably be helpful.

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Feel like I probably don't need to ask, but...

If I typed up what I've written so far of Ashe's book, would anyone read it over and give me some feedback on it?

Like, specifically feedback in regards to; How easy it was to read, how well you felt both the story itself and the sentence structure flowed, and your general opinion on the style and content. How it flows and how it physically/mentally feels to read it are like, the main things that I struggle with.

gonna go ahead and pin this so i can ask again when more people are around.

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kin list (probably incomplete) 

SPAS-12 Sabrina (Girls Frontline)
Aranea Serket (Homestuck)
Grimbark Jade (Homestuck)
Raphtalia (Rising of the Shield Hero)
High Elf Archer (Goblin Slayer)
Katia Managan (Prequel)
Dana (I Don't Want This Kind of Hero)
Sylvanas Windrunner (World of Warcraft)
Valerie Lark (Sanity Circus)
Roark "Rocky" Rickaby (Lackadaisy)
Cocona Cocomine (Flip Flappers)
Kizuna Ai (Virtual Youtuber)
Mash Kyrielight (Fate/Grand Order)
Momiji Inubashiri (Touhou)
Patchouli Knowledge (Touhou)
Valerie (OFF)
Clorica (Rune Factory 4)
Krul Tepes (Owari no Seraph)
Mei Hatsume (Boku No Hero Academia)
Tails (Sonic)
Yung Venus (Nuclear Throne/Gun Godz)
Tsumugi Kotobuki (K-On)
Toga Himiko (Boku No Hero Academia)
Gaige (Borderlands 2)
Jeanne d'Arc (Real Life and Everything Else)
Gilda (MLP)
Plague Doctor (Darkest Dungeon)
Joey Claire (Hiveswap)
Akari Akaza (Yuru Yuri)
Nephenee (Fire Emblem)
Cynthia (Fire Emblem)
Pam (Prague Race)
Leona (Prague Race)
Slugcat (Rain World)
Ram (ReZero)
Rin Shima (Yuru Camp)
Zero Two (Darling in the Franxx)
Ashe (Overwatch)
Ashe (Original)
Chaika Trabant (Hitsugi No Chaika)
Blacktip Reef Shark (Real Life)
Japanese Wisteria Vines (Real Life)
Mothra (Godzilla)
Big Sister (Bioshock 2)
Miss Beelzebub (As Miss Beelzebub Likes It.)
Noriko Sonozaki (Kiznavier)
Yamame Kurodani (Touhou)
Orca (I Don't Want This Kind Of Hero)
Gold Ship (Uma Musume)
Sypha (Castlevania Netflix)
Dorothy Hayes (Vall-Halla)

What if we put a shark's head on top of a robot spider! 

It'd look something... like this!

its subtitled Realta Nua I believe. it had voice acting.

they remade Fate stay nighy entirely without nsfw stuff

i think in Ashe's universe young vampires drink from the neck while adult vampires drink from the thigh area

mainly because thigh area is not appropriate for kids

10/10 would interact with for important information regarding the game i am currently playing

I found out i actually did draw myself as a sprite in the past, but by the look of it, i was clearly in a vent depressed/tired phase lmao.

its cool that -insert character here- is -insert not 'normal thing- but that doesn't change the fact that I don't like them

i probably wont ever read the books i have but... yeah

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